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Mark Rico's avatar

The last one! They're all good but that one's really clever.

Daniel Bishop's avatar

There is a fine line between clever and dumb as bricks haha I'm not sure which side that triolet falls on. Glad you enjoyed it though!

Mark Rico's avatar

If dumb as bricks makes me laugh, I'm all for it!

J. Tullius's avatar

Once a champion, always a champion.

Florey's avatar

Read them all! (yes, that is both saying that I have read them and a command to others to read them as well)

My favorites were Into the Age-Old Night and A Song for the Solstice-buried Sun. Hyphens like in the latter remind me of Hopkins. I also thought A Crooked Box really funny.

I'm finding that I like them the more I read them. :)

Daniel Bishop's avatar

Thank you, Florey! A Song for the Solstice-buried Sun was the last triolet I wrote before sending in my submissions. It was probably my favorite, but I didn’t end up submitting it. Not submitting my favorite triolet may seem silly but I was worried it might be too obscure.

Olivia Marstall's avatar

Idk what's more brilliant, the Dante one or the enjambed hyphen on "sing-song". These are all incredible.

Daniel Bishop's avatar

Thank you, Liv! I always know who I’m appealing to with a Dante reference haha the enjambed hyphen was a trick I recycled from one of my poems last year. Sometimes I worry that I’m working too hard to keep the refrain lines fresh. I’m glad you enjoyed them!

Kilby Austin's avatar

I really like the empty lamp one. Haunting.

Kilby Austin's avatar

Extra points for begging cleverly.

Daniel Bishop's avatar

Thank you, Kilby! I believe I did include that one in my submission. And a double thank you for the birthday coffee 🙏🏼

Amy Mantravadi's avatar

I think "Beside a Crimson Fount" is my favorite.

Daniel Bishop's avatar

Thank you, Amy! I'm glad that one resonated.