I heard the echo of what we talked about in the "clamorous, sandhill-crane-filled river" – but I really love how you didn't restrict yourself. It absolutely works.
Still thinking about this one. I enjoy the "bridal veil of cloud," and how the moon reappears as "the glowing bride" later on. I wasn't as quick to realize the "prowling groomsmen" were the wolves howling at the moon, but I think I was really tired the first time I read the poem because now when I read it I could picture the whole thing and didn't question that line. I like the father/son dynamic because it gives a human element and a concentrated personality to the night instead of it just feeling like a collection of images. Really good work that feels effortless, Daniel.
Thank you! I’m glad the logic of the poem came together. It took me a while to figure out what this poem was doing, and the few lines that reference the father/son relationship made everything click for me. I considered doing more with the bride/groomsmen imagery, but I think that might have ultimately detracted from the poem.
Marvelous imagery and lush sounds. This felt like a reward to attentive reading.
Thank you, Abigail!
This poem is brilliant, Daniel. Absolutely captivating and otherworldly.
Yes. Bookmarked to reread and reread.
I’m honored, Isabel. Thank you!
Thank you, Mark! It didn’t quite end up responding to your poem in exactly the way I mused about doing, but I’m happy with how it ended up.
I heard the echo of what we talked about in the "clamorous, sandhill-crane-filled river" – but I really love how you didn't restrict yourself. It absolutely works.
Still thinking about this one. I enjoy the "bridal veil of cloud," and how the moon reappears as "the glowing bride" later on. I wasn't as quick to realize the "prowling groomsmen" were the wolves howling at the moon, but I think I was really tired the first time I read the poem because now when I read it I could picture the whole thing and didn't question that line. I like the father/son dynamic because it gives a human element and a concentrated personality to the night instead of it just feeling like a collection of images. Really good work that feels effortless, Daniel.
Thank you! I’m glad the logic of the poem came together. It took me a while to figure out what this poem was doing, and the few lines that reference the father/son relationship made everything click for me. I considered doing more with the bride/groomsmen imagery, but I think that might have ultimately detracted from the poem.
I think you settled on the right proportions. Really lovely work, Daniel.
really good
Thanks, Huck.